no. is that cool too?

yes.

I know new iPods have a feature that allows you to change the tracks, only shaking the iPod. That must be great

Okay guys, may I ask you your advices about a few texts I wrote? I'd like to use them for new tracks but I don't know if they're good or shameful or whatever... so I need advices, please be honest! :)

Focus:

"You have to focus more", they say,
Mixing the human shapes
Into different packs
Without further study
Or protest.
We reach the path
Where no one will cry
Where no one will smile
Where no one will talk

Futurecriminality:

They are let alone
In front of big screens
They are let alone
We keep on talking about it
We do nothing
We do nothing

Fly:

A bird flew in the grey skies, over the
blurring window, Like a desperate plane
While the truck was waiting outside
Or so suggested noises & imaginations;
There was actually nothing left,
except lights and windows
The bird was gone.

Post-Amnesiac state brainstorming:

What I see: flying newspapers, dead leaves, red cloud, silent streets, echoed steps, loud shadow, nobody. A deafening silence. Chimes away. Dark fluids moving.

Today's happening:

Cold broken bones
Blocked between the sharped claws
Doors of everyday life.
Help comes from both sides
The trap is still automatically
Inactive, Inhuman - or is it active?
She sat

Soon #1:

They were all running panicly
Under the rock rain that's been happening for three days
When something new appeared
A giant shadow, surrounding everything
Destroying and corrupting
Spreading disassembled thoughts
Everywhere, omnisciently


Thanks in advance :)

I don't like the second one, I like the others, some nice imagery summoned. I'm not much of an expert on the "form", so I'll leave further comments to native speakers ha ha.
I keep reading those with lee's voice in my head (bloomington, indiana)

you got lees voice in your head? bastard give it back to him. nicfit...its not yours.

btw no I havent ordere cause that guy wanted a shitload for shippin.
keep me updated for other stuff I should check out

Thanks for the advice! Haha now I imagine them with Lee's voice as well :D

last week of holidays.

enjoy it!!!

yeah, definitely, enjoy

yeah definately the fox, hi!!!

I will try, thanks.

hey dude! how are you doing?

I'm currently chilling out at home. I have only one lesson hour at school this afternoon (English lesson from 2 to 3), - though I'm going to spend one more hour at school to work on the maths homework with my friend -,so I'll be back there in 45 minutes, but before that I'll have to eat!

me too. I a hungry like hell.
and this evening I hAVE TO PARTY WITH MY COLEAGUES...THAT WILL BE TOUGH

I have eaten wiener 5 minutes ago :p

bon appetit fox + al !

Gosh dude you're always partying, you're the last bastion of the rave generation :D

thanks! though my food is currently heating in the microwave heater right now, I'll have to wait like five minutes till it's ready

hahaha
the last time we was at that club a freind of mine and I got beaten up by 7 guys pretty bad. we are on topic right now I cant believe

what?

Wang.