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Old 01.15.2009, 11:41 PM   #1
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I've been reading a lot recently, so it's inspired me to write. I wouldn't really consider myself a writer, it's just something I do from time to time.

But would anyone like to read a bit?

http://docs.google.com/Doc?id=dw4mmsv_48ckh62ffc

It's kind of pulpy, and it's a little scatter-brained, and I haven't proof read it yet.

I'm about 1/3rd of the way done with it. I have a very rough plot that I'm fleshing out and building on as I go along, and the process of writing it has opened up a few plot possibilities I'm thinking about.

Feel free to comment. If it sucks though don't tell me. I'm not an experienced writer and I know that I'll just got better through writing and that kind of criticism would just discourage me.
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Old 01.15.2009, 11:58 PM   #2
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Pbradley refreshed the SYG page out of muscle memory. The rot of the forum would need a stronger detergent than a silly looking icon at the top right of his screen. But what is this? A new thread? Bold in orange like a Dutch hooligan, "So I've started writing again." The novelty alone drew in the information junky.
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Old 01.15.2009, 11:59 PM   #3
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Really good. I didn't expect to, but ended up reading it to the end. Would love to see what happens. Thanks.
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Old 01.16.2009, 12:16 AM   #4
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Really good. I didn't expect to, but ended up reading it to the end. Would love to see what happens. Thanks.

Thank you. It hasn't taken me very long to write this far, so hopefully I'll have it finished relatively soon, then I'll start working on another story.

Still not sure of how to end it, but I keep planting things that I may or may not use later, and I've still got awhile to go until I get to the point where I need to end it.
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Old 01.17.2009, 04:44 PM   #5
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I just had a dream and now I want to write a highly fictionalized script about John Fahey's search for Blind Joe Death.
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Old 01.17.2009, 05:55 PM   #6
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I just had a dream and now I want to write a highly fictionalized script about John Fahey's search for Blind Joe Death.

Do it!

That was a pretty fun read, I think Henry should start getting some action though with all those beautiful women around
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Old 01.17.2009, 08:19 PM   #7
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Old 01.17.2009, 08:39 PM   #8
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I'm currently stuck trying to flesh out a 1700 word story vignette into something double that size, for a college assignment. I've spent too much time trying to find a free download of Futura Bold so I can make my story look like it was typed up by Wes Anderson.
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Old 01.18.2009, 04:07 AM   #9
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A 3000 word fiction assignment? That's bullshit. If it's finished, turn it in as is and write "Fuck Yourself" at the bottom.

Fiction is finished when it's finished.

Goddamn it.
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Old 01.18.2009, 04:22 AM   #10
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I wrote a roughly 3,750 page (15 pages) fiction assignment for a final this last semester about the world losing all languages in a kind of reverse Babel story. The Library of Congress is burning to the ground at the end and a librarian is riddled with bullets.

I got an A in the class so I think the teacher liked it.
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Old 01.18.2009, 06:25 AM   #11
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I approve of this writing. I've a few minor criticisms - there's no need for the possessive apostrophe in "it's" - but generally speaking you're getting the narrative moving along nicely and quickly without losing characterisation. Also (and massive kudos for this) you're managing to use a future-y, sci-fi theme without it being gratuitously 'D&D geek wanking'.

I don't know about anyone else, but I absolutely hate when people treat sci-fi as a complete break with humanity in writing - I like to think the idea of a novel(la) is more about conveying human things rather than avoiding being able to create characters.

But yes - well done that man.
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Old 01.18.2009, 09:11 AM   #12
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INT. HOSPITAL DELIVERY ROOM – NIGHT

Inside the dimly lit Southern hospital room, a DOCTOR stands over a pregnant woman in labor as a storm rages outside. The woman screams in pain as the doctor prepares to deliver the baby.

NARRATOR: Some say ol’ Blind Joe Death was born as still as a damp sock with cataracts so clouded white, like glossy pearls.

Close up of the baby’s face as the doctor lifts the baby’s eyelids to reveal pitch white eyes.

DOCTOR: Sorry, ma’am, your baby is dead.

NARRATOR: See, for Joe, everything was backwards. He died when he was born and he was born when he died. The rest of it was his, you know, after.

Cut to an outdoor funeral service in the day as the mother lays the body of the stillborn baby into his small baby coffin. Upon the moment the mother lets her hands free, the baby emerges from his slumber.

NARRATOR: Now the preacher was fit to call it a blessed miracle but everyone else had other theories. Truth be told, nobody was quite certain who that baby’s daddy was but even that mother of his was frightened by them pearl eyes and the Lord knows that boy would be treated all the same. Cursed. Death incarnate in a small town in the great state of Georgia.
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Old 01.18.2009, 10:39 AM   #13
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Old 01.19.2009, 03:43 AM   #14
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I approve of this writing. I've a few minor criticisms - there's no need for the possessive apostrophe in "it's" - but generally speaking you're getting the narrative moving along nicely and quickly without losing characterisation. Also (and massive kudos for this) you're managing to use a future-y, sci-fi theme without it being gratuitously 'D&D geek wanking'.

I don't know about anyone else, but I absolutely hate when people treat sci-fi as a complete break with humanity in writing - I like to think the idea of a novel(la) is more about conveying human things rather than avoiding being able to create characters.

But yes - well done that man.

any it's/its your/you're stuff will be fixed when I read it over
I know the difference, but when I'm writing I'll often accidentally go to homonyms, because I think I write phonetically but read grammatically, and when I'm typing fast, I often don't read what I'm writing.

My last sci-fi story was wrong in the way you described. I think I realized that it's very hard to write that sort of sci-fi and make it good. There is the original Star Wars trilogy and what else? So I've decided to forgo that type of writing.
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Old 01.19.2009, 05:00 AM   #15
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I just finished the surgery passage.

It could almost end right at the end of that passage. It sort of feels appropriate. Maybe it feels appropriate because it would be easy. I haven't written myself into a corner yet like I feel I may if I continue the story. That, plus it's uncertain. It's not a happy ending, it's not a completely revealing ending in which all questions are answered in a disappointing way, it's not a tragic ending, and it's not a "return to normal but with some life lessons" ending. All things I want to avoid when ending my story.

Though I think I'm going to continue as I had originally planned. Because Act 2 will reflect Act 1 in a way that appeals to me.
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Old 01.19.2009, 12:07 PM   #16
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any it's/its your/you're stuff will be fixed when I read it over
I know the difference, but when I'm writing I'll often accidentally go to homonyms, because I think I write phonetically but read grammatically, and when I'm typing fast, I often don't read what I'm writing.

My last sci-fi story was wrong in the way you described. I think I realized that it's very hard to write that sort of sci-fi and make it good. There is the original Star Wars trilogy and what else? So I've decided to forgo that type of writing.

Yeah, I thought that would be the case, but some people are just never told this sort of thing (I know I wasn't ever told until I was 21). I suspect I habitually didn't do it wrong when I was in school, so it never came up.

I wouldn't even say Star Wars is a complete Deus ex techne - it's all very much classic Marxist stuff as far as I can make out, just set in space.
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Old 01.19.2009, 05:39 PM   #17
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By D+D geekery, I took it that you meant "sci-fi fantasy" type stuff, in which it's easy to lose focus on the characters.
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Old 01.21.2009, 05:43 PM   #18
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Well I've started on part 2, which will probably be of equal length to part 1.

BTW, that link updates whenever I save my copy, so if you'd like to read some more, please do, I've added quite a bit since I first posted it.
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